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...and the sun falls down as i wave away
and the wind, she moves as i bid good day
and the streets are wide and i hate to say
that his smile's fading from his face
and the stars crash down as i wave away
and the streetlamps flash throughout the day
and my words are thin so i hate to say
that your smile's fading from your face...
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Submitted: March 10, 2008
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This is the product of a really stressful relationship, a weekend in the mountains, my friend's roommate's music, and overall exhaustion. I guess you could see it as a chorus.

Title taken from :iconmurakisslave:
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~kirastorm:iconkirastorm: Mar 10, 2008, 3:21:32 PM
ohh this is nice. short and sweet and pretty and softly bitter

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fading in the future
the past awaits
=Volume-Junkies:iconVolume-Junkies: Mar 10, 2008, 3:22:01 PM
Thanks very much. :)

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It's amazing that, hours after you've left, I still smell you on my jacket, indented into the leather.
~Morgan-sama:iconMorgan-sama: Mar 10, 2008, 3:23:57 PM
Very beautiful use of words. The peace flows so smoothely, and the imagery is so profound, that something stirred a bit in my heart. I can truthfully say that I understand exactly what you're going through, seeing as I feel like I've been in a similar situation. Astounding. <3
The only critique I have is to capitalize your 'I's. :P

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It was a hint of discontent mixed with the smell of rain;
she convinced herself that nothing would ever change...
=Volume-Junkies:iconVolume-Junkies: Mar 10, 2008, 3:24:58 PM
Haha. I know. I'm a sucker for poor grammar, myself. Thanks for the fav and comment!

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It's amazing that, hours after you've left, I still smell you on my jacket, indented into the leather.
~Morgan-sama:iconMorgan-sama: Mar 10, 2008, 3:47:57 PM
Anyday. xD

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It was a hint of discontent mixed with the smell of rain;
she convinced herself that nothing would ever change...
=MurakisSlave:iconMurakisSlave: Mar 10, 2008, 5:47:26 PM
I love it. I'm going to run it by Mark, if you don't mind <3

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AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA.........
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You DARE bring LIGHT to my lair? YOU MUST DIE!
=Volume-Junkies:iconVolume-Junkies: Mar 10, 2008, 6:00:09 PM
Haha. Feel free. Just get me a recording of it! :P

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It's amazing that, hours after you've left, I still smell you on my jacket, indented into the leather.
=MurakisSlave:iconMurakisSlave: Mar 10, 2008, 8:58:48 PM
:D

So, how are you?

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AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA.........
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You DARE bring LIGHT to my lair? YOU MUST DIE!
=Volume-Junkies:iconVolume-Junkies: Mar 11, 2008, 9:01:45 AM
I'm coping with it all. The nervousness has gone away. :) I should be fully recovered by Thursday or so.

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It's amazing that, hours after you've left, I still smell you on my jacket, indented into the leather.
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